TLC by Chrouya
Script:	 Little Busters 06 [tl][#tlc][timed][edit][#qc]
Workraw: Little Busters 06 WR

8
This is Komari.
Oh hey, it's Komari.
{strange wording there}

[==SIGN== around 1:30]
Out to bury the cat.
I don't really know what happened,
but please be there for her. {comfort her}
Masato
[====]

19
a weak body and he was hospitalized.
a weak body and was therefore hospitalized.
{Also added "as result" for more context.}

30
Instead, I will share other stories.
Instead, I will create my own stories. {or share my self-made stories.}
{Missing the translation that he's the maker of the stories}

31
The chick was born form the egg.
A chick was born from an egg.
{I'd use an indefinite determiner here} 

33
The chick became a chicken and he stood among the eggs.
The chick became a chicken and laid another egg.
{faulty translation caused wrong edit on this line}

34
Whilst a chicken is on a walk, they forget that they were an egg.
Whilst on a walk, the chicken forgot it was once an egg itself.
{editor didn't see that this suddenly turned plural too. Fixed the whole line now}

40
Because it's a dream.
Because it's all just a dream.
{this was an old TLC note but I still keep it in}

51
{\i1}She was convinced that it was a dream.{\i0}
{\i1}She was convinced that it was all but a dream.{\i0}
{subete missing in tl}

54
{\i1}And thanks to that wish, Komari-san was able to smile brightly.{\i0}
{\i1}Due to that wish, Komari-san was able to smile brightly.{\i0}
{Repetition of "and thanks".}

55
When I was kid, I found a beautiful flower.
When I was a kid, I found a beautiful flower.
56
I nipped it off and went to take it my brother, but the flower withered quickly.
I nipped it off to handed it to my brother, but the flower withered quickly.
58
In this world, there are lots of things I don't want to know.
There's a lot of things in this world I don't want to know about.
59
Life would be better without knowing.
Life would be better without knowing those. {things}
{rewording these lines due to missing determiners and awkward English, etc.}

60
What happened?
What's wrong?!
{just an alternative from my side}

62
It was simple, so I brought changing clothes.
It's nothing much, but I brought some changing clothes.
{bad translation of kantan da ga, it's condescending}

65
We shouldn't ask her about it.
I think it's better to let it be for now.
66
I dunno.
Probably.
{The previous lines didn't connect at all}

67
Shouldn't you,
Could you,
{It's not something like a remark, it's a favor he asks}

71
This is my favourite  place. Near my brother.
I'm fine with this place, next to my brother.
{This line had a double space and British English, but I made the line flow better anyway now.}

74
You have to return to the girls dormitory, Komari-san.
You have to return to the girls' dormitory, Komari-san.
{Apostrophe}

77
Even if I won't be with you, then you will stay?
Even if I can't be with you, you won't go off somewhere?
{reverse phrasing}

80
Well, let's go to the room, Komari-kun.
Anyway, let's return to your room for now, Komari-kun.
{maa ii is more or less "anyway" in this context. I also missed the TL of hitomazu}

84
So it's just a coincidence.
So something like that has happened...
{what happened here? mistranslation.}

85
It seems that right now, Komari-kun believes that Riki-kun is her brother and she is protecting herself from sadness.
It seems that right now, Komari-kun believes that Riki-kun is her brother and is protecting herself from sadness.
{just my suggestion}

94
I don't want to know it either.
I didn't want to know it either,
{past tense}

99
are we able
are we still able
{in my opinion, these sentences seem horribly split. Anyway, added context}

103 104
So right now, only you can do something to help her.
We'll help you.  Together, we can do more than if it was just you.
==>
If so, the only one who can save Komari
and help her out of her misery, is you.
{The second line is totally made up here.}

108
{\i1}But how should I do it?{\i0}
{\i1}But how?{\i0}
{you can use the same omission as in the Japanese phrasing}

112
Don't look at me like that.
Don't make such a sad face.
{I feel this my suggestion gives a better context}

123
Onii-chan, can draw the next one for me, so I don't need it.
You can draw another one anyway, so I don't need it anymore.
{fixed phrasing}

129
She will forget about everything again, and she will have her good behavior back.
She will forget about everything again, and return to her old bright self.
{I think of something different when I think of good behavior}

130
It's always like this.
It has always been like this.
{present perfect}

134
When my wife died she was screaming and crying.
When my wife passed away she was screaming and crying as well.
{including "as well" , and a slight better sounding verb.}

135
She was engrossed into looking for her brother, her memories were in chaos.
She was engrossed into looking for her brother, and her memories were in chaos.
{lit. Looking for her brother with a distorted face, her memories in chaos...}

142
She is still recovering it.
It's repeating itself over and over.
{mistranslation}

146
But I'm sure that you two will be able to meet someday.
I'm sure that you two will be able to meet someday.
{removed the But(t)}

155
{\an8}Headstone: Kamikita, Takuya{TLC?}
{\an8}Headstone: The Kamikita Family
{It's a family grave}

166
Why are you saying such dumb things at time like this?
Why are you saying such dumb things at a time like this?

184
That's why you have to face the truth directly.
you have to face the truth directly.
{the repetition of that's why isn't needed}

185
I'm weak at it, but I have to draw it! {I dont know what to change here -OtakuFreak}
I'm bad at drawing, but I have no other choice!

186
{\an8}Sign: ?
{\an8}Sign: Hope this helps.

191
The drawing paper and cup from Kurugaya.
The drawing paper and cups of seaweed are from Kurugaya.
{wankappu mozuku, which is edible and healthy seaweed}

193  
{\an8}Sign: ?
{The sign is basically the four lines below}
Power yourself up with pork rice balls.  -Masato
I can't do anything for you, but do your best! -Kengo
Don't be too harsh on yourself.
Also, your drawings are pretty good! -Kyousuke


195
I can't do anything else for you, other than work hard!
I can't do anything for you, but do your best!
{see above}

197
And your drawings are really good.
Also, your drawings are pretty good! 
{see above}

{just like above, there's a sign at 19:39 which is just read aloud by Komari and Riki}

230
That's why I smile.
So please smile again.
{Komari is the subject}

248
But I can find many more wonderful things!
I'll find more things to fill me up.{ed: script had previous line repeated so I'm guesslating here}
==>
But I can find many,
many more wonderful things.
{basically, it just had to be split in two}

Episode Title: Let's find wonderful things.